-
-
-
-
-
-
-
-
-
-
-
-
-
-
-
-
-
-
Very nice. Good thinking towards religion. Hope Indian people follow the same.
-
Thank you ami. Thanks for reading this big story! Hope you enjoyed it.
-
-
“Kanimozhi is very happy today.
She dreamt of this day for almost thirty years.At the same time, she is little sad.
Sad, because her only child Rashmi will get married today
and will live separately with her husband in another town.For last twenty five yearsRashmi was her world,
her hope, her life line.
She is anxious too, because, being the only parent of Rashmi,
Kanimozhi has to take all the responsibilities related to the marriage.Kanimozhi dreamt about this day long back,
it’s matching with her dreams, almost everything.
Rashmi – a self-dependent, well-educated Indian girl,
like what she has thought about her child.
Still, a mother isalways a mother.
These all together made Kanimozhihappy,
anxious and sad at the single moment.”
>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>Hello, Ich, if I may call you by that name.
I like your story, it was going somewhere,
but I suggest you write in shorter sentences,
that way, your reader’s eyes find it easier to follow.Love overcomes all things,
particularly things of religion,
and you were able to express that notion well.Shorten your story,
because after all,
blogging is short stories, and not novels.Also, make sure that you have spaces between
all of your words, in case you are writing too fast.Just feedback and honest criticism from a friend.
Have a great day, and keep writing!
Moses Reyes
-
I wish I could go back and do some more editing on your story.
Is there an editing feature here?
-
-
-
-
- Load More
